For amateurs, i have to say, that wasn't too bad. 50% of the time, the camera angles were very good. I was impressed by that. Cheesy story line, but don't give up, keep making videos and you'll get better.
(ps- i am not a noob when it comes to video. I have a lot of experience and have won some local awards when it comes to video, so please don't say i don't know what i'm talking about
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